3．注意一些不可用于被动语态的动词。 误：Many stars are appeared in the sky at night. 正：Many stars appear in the sky at night.

[综合演练提能]

Ⅰ.以下句子含有考生常犯的错误，请改正

1．Dr. Smith, together with his wife, are to arrive on the evening flight.are→is 2．The car hitted the old man and drived away.hitted→hit;_drived→drove 3．It is high time we do something to reduce traffic accidents.do→did或在do前加should 4．There are many students are planting trees on the hill.去掉第二个are或在students后加who

5．Eat at school is very convenient for students.

句子改为：It_is_very_convenient_for_students_to_eat_at_school.

6．It was Sunday, they all went for a picnic in the woods.在逗号后加so或was→being 7．Would you please meet my uncle at the airport because this is the first time visit to the US？去掉time 8．While having our dinner, the doorbell rang.

在having_前加we_are或the_doorbell_rang→we_heard_the_doorbell_ringing 9．Recently our village has taken place great changes.

句子改为：Recently_great_changes_have_taken_place_in_our_village. 10．Fishing is his favorite hobby, and he also likes collecting coins. he_also_likes_collecting_coins→collecting_coins_also_gives_him_pleasure Ⅱ.下面的考生作文中含有10处错误，请改正

(2016·南昌市第三次模拟)生活中，朋友间免不了会有冲突和误会，解决方法之一就是及时道歉。假如你是李华，Henry是你最要好的朋友，你们约好昨晚7点半在新华书店门口见面。可是由于妈妈在医院看病，回家晚了，你得在家照顾妹妹。又因忘带手机而没能及时联系到Henry而失约了。请给Henry写一封道歉信以化解误会。

内容包括：

1．表示歉意；2.解释失约的原因；3.请求原谅。 注意：1.不得在文中出现作者的真实姓名；

2．语句连贯，词数100左右。作文的标题、开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。

A Letter of Apology

Dear Henry， I

am

really

sorry

_____________________________________________________________

I won't let things like that happen again. Yours， Li Hua [求诊病文]

A Letter of Apology

Dear Henry，

①I am really sorry that I can not meet you at 7：30 last night. ②I do hope you didn't wait too long outside Xinhua Bookstore.

③On yesterday afternoon, I had to look after my younger sister until my mother returned back home. ④She was ill and stayed at the doctor's so that she arrived at home very late. ⑤I ran all the way to the bus stop only finding the last bus had already left. ⑥I had to call a taxi, but it was already half an hour later. ⑦I was going to call up you, but I had forgotten my mobile phone at home. ⑧Finally, I had no choice but to go back home, disappointing and sad.

⑨I sincere hope that you will forgive me and we can be best friends as usual. ⑩I won't let things like that happen again.

Yours， Li Hua

[诊断结果]

第①句：can→could

第③句：On_yesterday→Yesterday;_去掉back或returned→came 第④句：去掉arrived后面的at 第⑤句：finding→to_find 第⑥句：later→late

第⑦句：call_up_you→call_you_up;_forgotten→left_behind 第⑧句：disappointing→disappointed 第⑨句：sincere→sincerely 第二步 高级表达增分(用时9周)

阅卷时，一篇高考作文往往在1分钟内就被判定生死，大众化的词汇、平庸的表达已使长时间工作的阅卷老师产生了视觉疲劳。在词汇方面：如果一篇作文中突然出现几个与众不同、让人眼前一亮的词汇，阅卷老师的给分也绝不会吝啬；在句式方面：如果考生多运用一些并列句和复合句等高级句式，并注意句式的灵活多变，使文章读起来抑扬顿挫，让考生深厚的语言功底得以体现，阅卷老师一定会毫不犹豫地将你的作文定位于五档线。

第四周 不落俗套的亮点词汇

写作最基本的要求是考查考生遣词造句的能力，遣词的原则是表达准确、地道自然、生动形象。如果考生在掌握了最基本词汇的基础上，能够将一些常用词汇进行升华，就将成为高考作文获得高分的亮点之一。

一、使用亮点词汇的4种方法 1．“语”众不同，避免人云亦云

写作时，恰当得体地使用别人可能想不到的词汇或表达，会给阅卷老师耳目一新的感觉。

①Of the two, I think the latter is the better. →Of the two, the latter wins my favor. (2015·重庆高考写作)

②I would also like to know how he felt in space and whether space travel is so interesting as I have read.

→I would also like to know how he felt in space and whether space travel is such great fun as I have read.

(2015·安徽高考书面表达) 2．更新换代，避免重复

写作时应尽量避免重复使用相同的词语，要用贴切多样的词语来展示自己的水平。用词不同、表达方式迥异，也是高级用法。

①We may have different opinions in organizing class activities. We may have different ways to deal with such a situation.

→We may have different opinions in organizing class activities. We may have various ways to deal with such a situation.(2015·浙江高考书面表达)

②We've built a new experiment building beside the old one and we've also built a library where the old playground used to be.

→We've built a new experiment building beside the old one and we've also set up a library where the old playground used to be.

3．单词与短语巧妙互用

一般情况下短语优先，应多使用短语、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。但有时单词比短语更生动，可以“一词传神”。

①Quite a few things caused the traffic problem. →Quite a few things gave rise to the traffic problem. (2015·江苏高考书面表达)

②We should try to improve ourselves through learning and prepare for the future. →We should take pains to improve ourselves through learning and get prepared for the future.

(2015·福建高考书面表达)

③We can look at this problem in many ways.

→We can view this problem in many ways.(view比look at更有“内涵”) ④We all live on one and the same planet.

→We all share one and the same planet.(share比live on更有“味感”) 4．用高年级学到的词汇代替低年级学到的词汇

为了表现自己的语言功底，吸引阅卷老师的眼球，应避免反复使用初中或小学阶段学过的词汇，尽量用高中阶段学到的词汇来代替。

①So long as we hold fast to our ideals and never give up, we are sure to achieve success. →So long as we hold fast to our ideals and never give up, we are bound to achieve success.(2014·山东高考书面表达)

②We offer hot water 24 hours every day in our hotel and the swimming pool is free to use any time you want.

→Hot water is available 24 hours every day in our hotel and you can have free access to the swimming pool any time you want.

二、使用亮点词汇的2点注意

1．注意增加亮词的“出镜率”，变消极词汇为积极词汇

阅读中能认识但写作中不会用的词汇属于消极词汇，写作中能运用自如的词汇为积极词汇，也就是平常所说的“第一反应词”。积极词汇量的多少直接决定着英语作文表达水平的高低。现在很多考生的困难是，头脑中的很多词汇介于积极词汇与消极词汇之间；另外，很多背到的消极词汇如果较长时间不接触就会变成陌生词汇。因此在备考过程中，我们要做的事情就是迅速扩大消极词汇量并且保持接触的频度，力争使其变成积极词汇。

很多考生作文驻足不前的一个重要原因是反复用初中学过的简单词汇，背了大量的亮词妙语而不用。这是一种懒惰的表现。建议大家在想到一个表达时，务必要想一想还有没有更好的表达方式，这就是我们平时常讲的“头脑风暴法”。例如想表达“美丽的”这个含义，大家首先想到的是“beautiful”，那么在下笔时，要想一想还有没有更出彩的表达，如“attractive”或“charming”等。再如表达“困难的”时，大家常用“difficult”，那是不是用“tough”或“challenging”更与众不同呢？

2．注意亮点词汇使用的场合

写作时，在用词上不可随心所欲，决不能为追求“高级”而使用复杂但毫无把握的词语，也不能满篇堆积所谓的“高级”词汇，否则给人过分炫耀之嫌，得不偿失。一般来说，一篇文章能用好三五个高级词汇就可以了。另外，为能更好地“完成规定的写作任务”，减少错误，特提醒同学们在使用“高级词汇”时，一定要注意遵循“准确、恰当”的原则，并且要注意使用的场合，难词和生僻词汇并不一定就是高级词汇，例如：