浙江高考新题型解题指导系列 三、应用文写作(一) 电子邮件/书信

(一)文体感知

假如你是李华，昨天你收到了美国笔友Jennifer的e-mail。她询问高考之后你的暑假打算，请你就以下内容给她回一封邮件。

1．出行计划：到海南旅游；

2．读书计划：读两本早就想读却没有时间读的小说； 3．社会实践计划：与一些同学参加保护环境的宣传活动。 注意：1.词数80左右；

2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 Dear Jennifer，

Yours， Li Hua

【范文欣赏】 Dear Jennifer，

①I am very glad to hear from you.②Yes，I am busy preparing for the coming College Entrance Examination，after which I will have a long summer vacation.

③My number one plan for the holidays is to take a trip to Hainan，enjoying beautiful nature and relaxing my tired body there—you cannot imagine how exhausted I am now.④Besides，I am going to read two novels which I have been wanting to read but can't find time to do.⑤Finally，I will take part in an activity about raising the public's environmental awareness with some of my classmates.

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⑥Best wishes.

Yours， Li Hua [文体分析]

电子邮件/书信类作文一般分为三段：第一段常常引出话题，在该篇文章中，话题为暑假及其安排；第二段为电子邮件或书信的正文，一般从几个方面展开说明或论述；该篇文章从三个方面具体说明暑假计划内容；第三段常常表达了祝福、祝愿。

[亮点展示]

句②中的亮点较多：使用了较高级的非限制性定语从句；准确使用了两种时态——一般现在时和一般将来时；短语be busy doing形象地表明了作者的现状。句③用“—”连接两个并列句；在前一个分句中使用了非谓语的各种形式。句④中过渡词besides巧妙地连接了一、二两个计划，在which引导的定语从句中含有but引导的两个并列句。句⑤是个高级的简单句，其中含有一些高级词汇，比如：raising the public's environmental awareness等。

(二)习作评阅与提升

假设你叫李华，你的一位朋友John刚从国外归来，邀请你参加本周日在他家举办的朋友聚会，但你不能参加。请你根据以下要点给他写一封电子邮件：

1．表达想参加的意愿； 2．忙于准备高考； 3．由于感冒，身体不适； 4．表示歉意并另约时间。

注意：1.词数80左右；开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数； 2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3．参考词汇：高考 the College Entrance Exam Dear John，

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I'm looking forward to your reply.

Yours， Li Hua

[习作评阅] Dear John， I am extremely sorry to tell you that I can't go to your party this Sunday. It is very kind ①for you to invite me to your house and I look forward to ②go to your party and ③share your experiences abroad.To my regret，I will ④absent from your party because of the coming College Entrance Exam，and I am now really busy ⑤prepare for it.What's worse，I ⑥caught a bad cold lately and I am really not myself. Anyway，we ⑦have many more chances to get together.⑧ (让我们把时间定在考试之后行吗？) I'm looking forward to your reply. Yours， Li Hua [自我提升] Dear John， I am extremely sorry to tell you that I can't go to your party this Sunday. 1.高级词汇 在⑥处加入适当过渡词： What's worse 1.词汇搭配错误 ①把for改为of 2.语法错误 ②go改为going ③share改为sharing ④添加be动词 ⑤把prepare改为preparing ⑥改为现在完成时have caught ⑦改为一般将来时will have 3.遗漏要点 补⑧处要点： Shall we make it after the exam？ It is very kind of you to invite me to your house 2.高级句型 and I ① look forward to going to 把④改为with的复合结构： your party and sharing your ② with the College Entrance 把⑤改为介词＋关系代词引experiences abroad.③ to my regret，Exam just around the corner I will be absent from your party ④because of 3