I genuinely hope that you will take my suggestions into consideration. Best wishes that you will have a good time there. It is a golden chance that you will gain in summer vacation. In short, Enjoy yourself.

Yours sincerely, WangLei

2017年6月上海高考

假设你是明启中学的王磊，你校学生会即将组织一次徒步活动，并在校园网公布了如下方案，征求师生的意见。写一封邮件给活动组织者，内容须包括： 1.你认为方案中需要改进的地方及改进建议; 2.你的理由。

徒步活动方案 主题：发现上海 时间：5月1日(周日)下午3点 路线：从人民广场出发，途径南京路，抵达外滩(the Bund)后原路返回

Hearing the news that our Students Union will organize a walking program and has put the drafted plan on the Internet, I’m writing to air my thoughts about it as follows.

To begin With, from my point of view, the time planned is not appropriate. As is known to all, the first day of May is the first day of holiday in China so that the center city of Shanghai is sure to be crowded on that day. So the date had better be postponed till the weekend before or after the holiday, thus ensuring that we students have a good taste of beauty of Shanghai. Moreover, I hold the idea that the route should be revised. Personally, after approaching at the Bund, it’s not a desirable option to go back according to the originate route. Instead, we students can go to other places of interest to go back to school, which guarantees a golden opportunity of witnessing the beauty of Shanghai.

In a nutshell, all the above thoughts are based on my personal perspective and there may still leave something to be desired, but as far as my strong wish to contribute to the program is concerned, I would be much obliged if you could take my suggestions into account.