an annoying dramatic deterioration, more and more people arrive at an approval that people should shut down mobile phones when being with friends or relatives.

3. The smart phone is really the most controversial modern invention, bringing enjoyable relaxation and great convenience on one hand and causing problematic phone addiction and consequent interpersonal isolation on the other hand. 句子成形步骤： 1）写出简单句

The smart phone is controversial. The smart phone can make people relaxed.

The smart convenience.

phone brings

The smart phone will make people addict to the phone.

The addiction to the phone causes interpersonal isolation. 2) 整合简单句

The smart phone is controversial, which can make people relaxed, bring convenience but will make people addict to the phone, which causes interpersonal isolation. 3) 增加表达精确性和美感

The smart phone is really the most controversial modern invention, bringing enjoyable relaxation and great convenience on one hand and

causing problematic phone addiction and consequent interpersonal isolation on the other hand.

consequent adj.随之发生的；作为结果的必然的 抵挡作文进阶演练

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