创新英语大赛优秀作文
【篇一：全国创新英语大赛优秀范文及点评】
题目：
directions:
read the following paragraph and write a composition as
stated at about 300 words in 60 minutes. your composition will be graded according to clarity, accuracy and
meaningfulness.in accordance with cri news, the spirit of
chinese volunteers, from responding to the may 12 earthquake to the 2008 beijing olympic games, not only touched the chinese people, but also generated worldwide attention. official statistics show that china has accumulated about 8 billion hours of volunteer work from 380 million volunteers since 1993 and is going to have more and more volunteers, especially the youth.
how do you understand volunteer work? in what way(s) is it important to promote the well-being of individuals, families, communities and the world at large? your writing ought to contain three parts, your viewpoint, the supporting ideas, and the conclusion.
come and join us in volunteer work right now! 陈茜
江苏省哈尔滨市第三中学高三18班 dear grandfather: how are you?
i am writing to invite you to join us, in the next year, to be a voluntear in the great event, which is to hold in shanghai. we, a generation born in the 90s in our city, have made a team to do the volunteer work. and you are welcomed by all our team members awing to your great amount of knowledge about chinese traditions and culture. please dont tell me you are too old to do this job. i believe you are sure to accept my invitation after reading my following explannation of the importance of the volunteer work.
nowadays, volunteer work, which has raised public interest and concern, is becomming more and more popular
throughout the world. as is known to all, volunteer work is not only meaningful but also necessary. one my personal wete,
whats more, its interesting and pleasant! it help us develop oursel .
viduals, especially those young, to do volunteer work is an awailuabe wany to goin social experience. by doing volunteer work, they can meet vorrious people and they may run across all kinds of troubles. they however, can become mature and determined by solving these problems. you know, no pains, no gains. also, individuals will realize that they do make a difference in someone elses life, even the whole event, the world! their confidence can be rovised and confidence is what it takes to do any job well.
for families, if youre the side that received the help of the volunteers, of couse your issue will be more easily dealt with. if youre the side who give others your hand, you will realize there exists no better way to educate your children that “a
virtwre deserues amother” because youll get the best present - smile deeply from ones heart, in the whole world.
it is a great chance for all members getting closer to each other in communities by taking
part in volunteer work. their team spirits, their co-operation will be great improued. so, why not?
the most importantly, for the whole world, for the entire
human race, volunteer work will make earth a better place to live in, it is through volunteer work that we know there are so many people are willing to help others although they cant get money from it. it is through volunteer work that we know we are all brothers and sisters, that we are all families.
my dear grandfather, cae on! join us and help introduce owr great chinese culture to the world. 21 centuring is on open cewtury. you can trust yourself and please trust us, too! well help you and we need you help! lets make the world a better place by being a volunteer! its a small step for us but it is a leurge one for the whole world! love you.
your granddaught. 专家建议：
句子之间的衔接做的还不是很到位，建议多练练关联词的用法。词汇不够丰富，句型变化不多，建议多看些范文，多练一些经典句型。 专家点评：
文章立意很好，整体结构清晰，语言大体流畅，还能够引经据典，显示出有一定的英语文化底蕴。
to be a volunteer ，bring a ray of sunshine 陈天悦
山东省济南市山东省齐钢高级中学高三4班 dear tom:
it is a great pleasure for me to have the wondeful chance to put pen to paper and send my greetings to you. you said that you wanted to be a volunteer and didnt know whether you should or not. i want to help you analyse it.
in my opinion. i think it is not noly a good chance to help
others but also a good opportunity to make selp-improvement. youd better participate in the volunteer work. if we compane youth to flouers, as is often the case, then the young
volunteers are the most beautiful flowers. by joining in the vounteer work, you will leam how to help others and how to love others. whats more you can also find it out that there are many people suffering from disaster and then you will value your comfortable life. although you may feel very tired as a volunteer and it may cost you much time to help others, i still insist that you should be a volunteer because the advantages bright about by volunteer work overweigh the disadvantages. it all the people refused to be volunteers, the people suffered from the may 12 earthquake could lose heart and most of them wouldnt have the chance to survive from that disaster. if none of the people wanted to be a volunteer, the beijing olympic
games would be a failure. if every people didnt feel like being a volunteer, there would be no people cleaning the environment and protecting the beautiful scenery automatically. it was terrible! from all mentioned above,
volunteers play a very important part in our daily life. to be a volunteer will gain glory for china. as is brow to all, chinese children are always laughed at for lack of practice. so to be a volunteer is a good chance to canpensate for it.
from my point of view, its high time that you became a volunteer and learned to help others. if everyone makes a contribution to helping others, the world will be much more beautiful!
at last, wish you all the best!