2020年高考英语新题型写作技巧八 强调倒装虚拟语气句型和丰富细节的手段

8. We left the theatre the moment the performances was over. 9. Your performance was so wonderful that I was deeply impressed. 10. With the technology developing quickly, we can live longer in the future. 11. What surprised us so much was that he won the game.

12. Not until he failed in the exam did he realize that he had wasted much time playing computer games. 13. If I had time, I would attend your party.

14. Not only do his poems have a strong influence on Chinese literature, but also they have been translated into many foreign languages.

15. It is because it’s a good chance for you to learn the natural knowledge of China that we really look forward to your participation

16. It is the time and energy we spend on the present that makes it valuable rather than the money we pay. 17. Look at the terrible situation I’m in. I should have taken your advice. 18. If only I had followed your advice.

19. Out rushed a group of young men, still discussing the performance with great enthusiasm. 20. So kind and considerate are you that we hope to be friends with you wherever you are.

二. 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。请尽量使

用各种句式技巧。

Steve was the most amazing person in all of Minneapolis, and he was my cousin. By the age of 19, Steve was a star baseball player at the University of Minnesota. I wanted to be exactly like him. So when Steve asked me to go with him on a spring fishing trip in northern Minnesota, I was excited!

After planning the trip, we gathered clothes and supplies, and began our great adventure. We reached the Superior National Forest in northern Minnesota by early evening. On our way to the campsite, Steve pointed to a small house faraway in one of the mountains, saying that it was the ranger station (护林站) where the forester worked. Finally, after a long walk, we reached the campsite and set up the camp as the sun was setting. Steve knew all the tricks of an experienced wilderness camper. After we gathered enough wood from the forest, he started the campfire using only stone and steel — no

matches. For supper we feasted on freeze-dried beef, wild rice and pea soup. I ate greedily after all that work.

Tired enough, we climbed into our sleeping bags early and talked about our plans for fishing the next day. We were still talking quietly when a sudden north wind picked up; the temperature dropped and it began to snow. Steve found a way to increase the temperature inside the tent. He dragged a log (原木) from the forest to the opposite side of the campfire. Then he wrapped aluminum foil (铝箔) around the log. The heat from the fire reflected off the foil and into the tent. Soon images of lake fish were filling my dreams.

The snow had stopped, but sometime later a powerful wind must have kicked up the flames of our dying fire. I was abruptly awakened by Steve. Our tent was on fire. Frightened, I ran out of the tent immediately. The tent collapsed with Steve inside. Without any thought of endangering myself, I reached into the burning tent and pulled him to the icy lake. Fortunately, we were not seriously hurt.

注意:

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;

2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1:

Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our difficult situation.

Paragraph 2:

Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest. ___________________________________

题目二 【答案】

One possible version:

Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our difficult situation. Our campsite was in the deep of the forest, really far away from the highway. We were in the middle of nowhere, wearing only underwear, with our supplies burnt into ashes, including our cellphones. Even Steve was unsure what to do next. The only thing we could do was just sitting in the cold air and wondering how to get out of the forest.

Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest. Anxiously we listened and stared into the darkness. A jeep appeared. A forester had spotted the light from the fire and had come to have a check. Into the warm vehicle jumped Steve and so did I. Then the forester drove us to the ranger station, where we were given clothes and were able to call our parents. Steve and I had many more camping adventures from then on, but it was on this trip that Steve began to treat me more like a friend and equal, rather than a younger cousin. Our friendship has continued to this day.

丰富写作细节的技巧手段

近几年随着高考新写作概写和续写的引入,书面表达的开放性也越来越大。如果只是做一些简单机械的翻译或者忙乱无章地套用模版,不仅字数可能不够,而且会让文章读起来空洞生硬。因此考生平时在训练书面表达时,需要积累写作材料,学会在逻辑合理的情况下适当地充实细节内容。一篇优秀的书面表达,不仅要做到把话写清楚说明白、把意思清晰完整地表达、注意行文之间的连贯和过渡外,还要用之前章节所讲的内容技巧对文章进行润色和加工,这样就会展现考生良好的遣词造句的能力。以下是常见的几种丰富语言细节的方法:

(一). 追加成分, 丰满文句

要点基础上是当地增加合乎逻辑的附加成分,如定语、状语、非谓语、独立主格等结构。这些可以帮助考生更清晰、准确地表达主题。这里列举例子一二。具体写作技巧的运用请详见本专题的前几期学案。以下的例子学生们可以先自己尝试丰富细节,再看参考答案。

1. 添加修饰

例1: I will take part in some social activities.

→ If possible, I will take part in some social activities so that I can get more familiar with the

society. (添加状语从句)

例2: I suggest that the teacher should choose more English films.

→ As a young student, I suggest that the teacher should pick out more English films that appeal to

us teenagers, thus making English learning more amusing. (添加定语从句和非谓语动词)

例3: Its Chinese Literature major is perfect for you. (2018北京高考书面表达)

→ Its Chinese Literature major is perfect for you, where you can be completely soaked in Chinese

profound history and abundant culture. (添加定语从句)

例4: Undoubtedly, it’s easy for me to communicate with foreigners. (2018浙江高考书面表达) → There is no doubt that there is not any problem for me to communicate with foreigners. (添加

同位语从句)

2. 变换句式

例1: The quality of life has improved and we regarded watching films as a good means of

entertainment.(2017江苏高考书面表达)

→ The quality of life has improved and we regarded watching films as a good means of

entertainment. (主动变被动)

例2: According to the school, a large number of paper-cutting works by experts throughout China

will be on show. (2017全国二卷书面表达)

→ It’s said that a large number of paper-cutting works by experts throughout China will be on

show.(it作形式主语)

例3: The moment when I asked them to have a try themselves came next. (2018北京高考书面表达) → Next came the moment when I asked them to have a try themselves. (倒装句) 例4: I’ve learned how to balance study with life with the help of my teachers.

→ It’s with the help of my teachers that I’ve learned how to balance study with life. (强调句) (二). 补加语句,充实内容

根据行文走向,是当地增加一些与主题相关的语句,或由要点衍生的句子,既能起到前引后联的作用,又能补充一些相关信息,帮助内容的消化。

1. 列举具体的事例来补充说明 例1: I like sports very much.

→ I am keen on sports, such as basketball and football.

例2: We teenagers should try to protect the environment and save the earth.

→ We teenagers should try to protect the environment and save the earth. For example, we can

use recyclable bags instead of plastic ones, refuse disposable products, plant more trees and save water and energy.

2. 添加与所给信息相关的神态、动作、心理描写和写作背景等内容 例1: After supper, the man went to his bedroom.

→ After a rich meal, the fat man slowly made his way to his bedroom. (神态、动作) 例2: I went swimming in the river west of the village now and then.

→ I went swimming in the river west of the village now and then. The water in the river was very

crystal clear. (背景渲染)

例3: I found some bad behavior.

→ I was quite disappointed to find some disgusting behavior. (心理)

3. 结尾发挥,表达你的感受、评价、愿望、倡议等。

例1: While I stood all the way home, I felt very content with what I did. 例2: From my perspective, such activities are necessary and rewarding.

例3: Additionally, if she’d like to learn Chinese, I will be more than delighted to give her assistance.

例4: With everyone’s contributions, we can turn our school into a comfortable learning environment.

(三). 添加过渡,行文流畅

根据行文或段落需要,在句与句或段与段之间适当增加过渡词或过渡句可以避免写作结构松散、条理不清、语言不畅等弊端,还可以使文章会燃一体,从而提升表达的层次。具体详见本专题学案(五)。 例1: The whole meal was good but the wine in particular was incredible. 例2: However, not until the match was over did I realize that we became the loser.

例3: On the one hand, I can earn some money by doing it to assist my parents, and on the other hand,

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